A commentary on an Upstart article regarding the Victorian pill testing

by Winmas Yu (SID: 450536382)

This post is a commentary on an article regarding the Victorian yet-to-be approved pill testing scheme, posted on Upstart, written by Brittany Lyons.

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A screenshot of the Upstart article by Brittany Lyons.

While the text has cited positive responses from health experts and students, Lyons did not seek comments from politicians or officials, explaining what was refraining the pill testing program from legislation.

On the other hand, since the article covered various legal and implementation concerns that might arise, it would be better for Lyons to insert sub-headings in between paragraphs to clearly identify the topics.

Despite the minor problems, the lead of the article is clear and concise, indicating the essential information of the article, “Brittany Lyons explores the possibility of pill testing in Victoria and any potential legal consequences” (Lyons, 2016).

On the use of multimedia elements, Lyons has embedded URLs in the article for the featured organisations and contextual information, giving readers additional experiences “to explore further on [their] own” (Foust, 2009, p.155).

One image of recreational pills is also presented. However, it would be better for Lyons to include few more additional photos and videos of the interviewees and festival-goers.

Tags are used to classify the article but social media sharing buttons are absent.

 

Word count: 199

Resource:

Foust, J.C. (2009). Online journalism: Principles and practices of news for the web (2nd ed.). Scottsdale, AZ: Holcomb Hathaway, Publishers, Inc.

Lyons, B. (2016, March 22). Victorian pill testing awaits approval [Web log post]. Retrieved from http://www.upstart.net.au/2016/03/22/victorian-pill-testing-awaits-approval/

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One thought on “A commentary on an Upstart article regarding the Victorian pill testing

  1. Good post Winmas! I definitely agree that the article you’ve analysed would easily be improved with the use of subheadings, and the addition of some more interesting photos. Neither are very difficult to do and certainly enhance the online experience for a reader.

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